English - Writing
Well done Thehansa - I can see you've tried really hard with your speech punctuation here and have used a very original and fun idea for your poem! 10HP
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Great effort both of you!
Zaine - you have used punctuation well, including speech punctuation. Take care not to miss out words when writing up.
Libby - you've used some good description here to really paint a picture in the reader's mind. Remember a comma when you use more that one adjective to describe a noun :)
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Alice's excellent play script. 10HP - what a marvellous modrern twist on a traditional fairytale. Super layout too - it looks just as a play script should.
Great use of fronted adverbials here Ben Well done. 5HP
Great advert for a hangman's noose from Izzy. I especially like her use of rhetorical questions. 5HP
Thehansa's 'Story of Bravery'
Andrew's story - 5hp
I love your beginning 'In a land of misery and sorrow...' Some other great vocabulary here too. Try to remember capital letters after your full stops Andrew. Sorry that this is sideways!
Alice's story. You can click on it to open up the document and see the end!
You set the scene very well in this story Alice. I also love your use of speech and the synonyms of said you've used. Remember to begin a new line for a new speaker. 15HP
Great story Gabriel! I like your use of rhetorical questions and you've used speech punctuation well. Be careful not to muddle up past and present tense. 10HP
What an amazing story Connie! You have used the weather to create atmosphere so well and your vocabulary use is extremely ambitious. Well done for using lots of fronted adverbials too - remember your commas next time :) 15HP
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Excellent biscuit instructions Alice. They look delicious! 8HP.